I'm gonna be honest; I looked at my screen for a while before I came up with this one. I even had written half of another poem. I was in a big mood for some structure playing, and so I tried out a new style called a Tanka. It's a Japanese five line poem whose first and third lines have five syllables while the rest have seven. Unfortunately, I looked at that poem and realized that it was not going to come out, so I started from scratch.
Keeping the whole playing with structure in mind, I decided something new: DIFFERENT SIZED STANZAS! As you can see, the first stanza has two lines, the second three, the third four, and the final has one. It ended up working very well with the new theme I came up with about rain. BECAUSE IT FINALLY RAINED TODAY! It never actually rains here, I've hypothesized. The sky threatens you, then the clouds leave, then they come back the next day. Seriously. I think the structure ended working out great with the poem.
Moral: things get resolved in one way or another.
Things sure have a style,
Like the sky: suspense.
I suppose the anticipated
Holds a certain glory
When strain is dissipated
And nothing is tense.
This is the weather’s story.
Because, as I saw, for a very, very long while,
This hanging remained,
But finally it rained.
Unpublished Material, ©2011 Cali Digre
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Thursday, July 7, 2011
Sunday, July 3, 2011
Poooooooem (7 o's long)
Today I took a hike in Nordmarka and around Sognsvann and encountered this:

Since this pond was so smooth I literally couldn't tell what was it and what was the sky, I decided it would make a nice poem.
Moral: things may be similar, but they are not the same.
Water blends too well with things,
As if it were all on single strings.
A certain place finds my eyes,
Not to be described as one noun.
They clouds are gray, this place like ashes.
And so I watch it, and I
Am positive that this is the sky.
But a little boy splashes,
And then I realize
I’ve been looking down.
Since this pond was so smooth I literally couldn't tell what was it and what was the sky, I decided it would make a nice poem.
Moral: things may be similar, but they are not the same.
Water blends too well with things,
As if it were all on single strings.
A certain place finds my eyes,
Not to be described as one noun.
They clouds are gray, this place like ashes.
And so I watch it, and I
Am positive that this is the sky.
But a little boy splashes,
And then I realize
I’ve been looking down.
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